Thursday, May 13, 2010

Exciting Sentences - Interesting Adjectives, Adverbs and Connectives

In writing, we've been learning to make our sentences really exciting for the reader.  

The kids in room ten had to change short simple sentences into amazingly descriptive and exciting sentences.





Here's what we started with:

Maui sat fishing.  The sun sped across the sky.

And here's a few examples of our exciting sentences.

Sadly, Magical Maui sat fishing, meanwhile the lavery sun raced across the clear sky.  By Thomas D

Powerful angry Maui impatiently sat fishing.  The flaming, boiling, hot sun quickly raced across the clear, blue sky.  By Emma

Maui angrily sat fishing, with his angry brothers, Maui did not have a lot of fish.  He looked up at the clear, blue sky.  He saw the fiery sun quickly race across.  By Luke

 




4 comments:

  1. Thank you Hayden for your blog site - it's so good to be able to see some of what the children are doing in your classroom, and to enjoy sharing in their achievements. Kate Turner

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  2. I loved doing the Maui sentenses. From Samantha [In Room 10]

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  3. cooooool Room 10. From Gywn Samantha's Mum

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